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I ThoughtThis was never a we
This was as nothing as could be
I was happy
At last, at least i believed

Again again, i am swept to the sea
Again again, i bleed i bleed
I sing i sing, for you for you
I hoped i hoped, too soon too soon

For YouI fell in love with the fact that
You are the only man who can make me feel
Bad enough to cry. It's not a bad thing, it just means
You are the only man whose opinion I hold higher than myself.
I fell in love with your disapproval at my pretentiousness, even though
You think I'm different from all those other girls
(even though I'm really not, but I'm glad you said that.)
You refuse to lump me in with the rest of the world
I fell in love with your stubborn insistence that
You are superior to the average person,
And even more with the fact that
You could be humble about it.
I fell in love with all of your
Inconsistencies
Shortco

I'll be here for YouI'll be here for you
when no one else is
To love you
to care for you

Being in your arms
being there for you
to hold you tightly
and never let you go

I'll be here for you
when you feel left alone
with no one to love
I'll be here for you

To care for you
to love you
until the end
of our lives

I'll be here for you
to keep you safe
to be here
and to love you

Like you never felt this way before
I'll hold you tight
face this world together
with no one else in sight
But you and I

I will wait for you"I will wait for you"

A whisper from him
His dieing sentence
Said to her
A love's promise

She watches in horror
As his eyes leak bleakness
His chest vibrates no movement
His mouth echoes no breath

"I love you"

She whispers silently
To the love she has lost
To the life she must live
Forever without him
Forever thinking of him

An Uncertain OutcomeI never thought I could fall in love with you
There were alot of things that I thought would never happen too
Between you and I, some I still wonder at why
The more I try to reason, the more i'm lost
Therefore I shall not try to reason at all
Just let things come as they might, whether wrong or right
I'll let my heart judge these affairs from now on
I think that how it ought to be anyhow
So the next time we meet there will be nothing to press
Doing so would result in a large mess
One that i'm not prepared to put to any kind of test.

The QuietDo you see this body
With etched on lines framing my eyes
When I smile
Or frown
This extra luggage
Around my middle weighing me down
Pounds of flesh
Wide platypus feet
Gray that I try to hide
The windows of my soul are grimy
Teeth that are stained from too many cigarettes
And coffee
Hair that is chopped off short
So that I look like a boy
An eyebrow ring
Tattoos
See me
Not conforming
To a society that is starched white
With pleats
I am woman
I spit at injustice
Hear the voice that I speak
It comes from many years on this earth
I am more than this body
There is no truth to an unkind justice
Do not be blind

I'm Fine"How are you?" They ask.
I reply with, "Fine."
"How have you been?"
"okay."
"How was school?"
"Good."

They found out I was cutting,
And it hit them
That I wasn't "Fine."
I was in pain.

In front of the counselor,
They promised things would change,
They promised I would get help.
And I believed them.

But I was stupid to fall for it.
The one and only "help" I received
Said I was depressed.
That I needed counseling.

They checked my wrists daily.
I wasn't allowed behind closed doors.
I couldn't be around knives.
I wasn't allowed to write.
But it was all for show.
All their precautions stopped.

What would happen
If the fami

Wandering WonderWords I wonder,
ever present,
never there.

In the silence,
it's waiting,
ever whispering,
take care.

There is nothing,
I can say, I'm certain,
You've been torn.

And left me nothing,
but letters,
That wander, unborn.

Broken PiecesIn an instant
It shatters
Pick up the pieces
Bond them with the glue of mistrust
Re-frame that perfect picture
That you hold so dear

Words Unspoken"Hey, what's the matter?"

'Everything.
Everything is falling apart
And I know in my heart
Nothing is alright
I try and struggle and fight,
But nothing is as planned,
Like winds stealing sand,
It's all gone at the end of the day,
And I just need someone to tell me it's okay'

"Nothing."

Answer MeQuestions scare people away,
If they scare you away from me,
Then I guess we shouldn't be friends,
I ask to receive answers,
If you can't answer me,
Then find another person,
That likes to deal with rude people,
Unlike me.

Music in my soulIt's the music I now understand
Ignore it's message I now can't
I hear the music of the song
My mind hearing it along

The song begins, sounds play
The words in my mind still stay
Listen closely, listen good
The words finally understood

They come around, grab my soul
The words have reached their goal
My mind is depressed, I feel down
Upon my face an eternal frown

The sounds play with my heart
My moods always far apart
Sad now, happy a moment later
Both of each other the greater

Enjoy the music for the sound
It will make you jump around
Enjoy the music for the words
It's you soul it girds.

I WonderWill I ever tell you, I wonder,
How you make me feel?
It's doubtful at best
For I don't even know
Who you are
I may have clues
But do I really want to know?
Yes, of course I do
Just the thought of you
Passing through my mind
Fills my heart with joy
I want to dance with you
Sing with you
Let you in my heart
And hope you want the same
But I'm not sure
If I have the courage
To tell you
Or even figure out who you are

This is for youThis is for you
The one who has had a heartbreak
or two or three

You are not alone
You walk among friends

Of young and old
Hard and soft
Smart and stupid

No matter what happens
Get back up again

Fight the battle
Win the seige
Reclaim your life

Take back your heart

Was It All A Lie?The funny thing is,
You can walk past me
And totally ignore me
Acting like I don't exist
Without an inch of guilt in your black heart
After all the things we have been through
After all the times we have been there for each other
And you act like it never happened

The funny thing is,
You can look in the mirror
Thinking you're the best
Thinking you are too good for everyone
After all the things I have done for you
After all the things we have put each other through
Through thick and thin
And totally forget that I was once in your life
That you needed me

That you loved me

It's like you're a totally different per

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Why?Am I a bad person when I wish for you to die?
I want you to suffer. I want you to cry.
God's presence seems to be lacking in me,
Cold, I feel so cold in the inside,
Am I a bad person?

Am I a bad person when I lust for your body?
This is not love, I know it's not.
It seems I forgot what I truly want.
But I can't stop until I get what I want from you.
I'm sorry darling; love has nothing to do with this.

What will I believe despite my good intentions?
I pray to God and sell my soul to the devil,
Do I deserve your forgiveness?
I don't think I do,
Yet why do you wrap your arms around me and say I'm free?
Why did you say I could be?

I wonderI still remember those days when we were young,
The playground swings and every breathe I took,
The smell of the flowers, the look in your eyes,
It was casual and fun wasn't it?
The laugh and memories,
It sure killed time away.
We still talk so it's okay,
Even though I panic now,
Because I want you to know how I feel,
Maybe I don't?
Are these feelings fake?
Should I hide them away?
But you're so beautiful.
Did you ever notice?
I wonder.

Still Beautiful to MeWhen people tease you for the way that you look,
Please know this isn't your war.
Close the book. Burn the pages.
Our soul is like a piece of paper,
Easily ripped to pieces,
Though beauty is hidden between pages,

You sit still contemplating how to please those you hate,
Will you become one of them, or will you be yourself?
You let your inner demons lead the way,
As you follow aimlessly, is there any point to life anymore?
Your whole world turns grey,
Your eyes go blank; will you make it through the night?

Your life is still worth the pain,
It gets better in the end.
I know because I've been through the same.
My feet have the s

For youI'm lost in time,
I've told myself, all is fine,
I walk the path I chose,
You walk yours,
Her black hair brushes the wind,
Silk.

I say hello, but only in my mind,
After all, she's doing just fine
Without me, I forgot to mention,
My lungs are screaming.
Give me Attention.
I want your attention.

A stare, as cold as today's winter day,
Maybe perhaps, she too, wants me to stay.
The halls echo, the sound of footsteps.
Then she passes, emotions gone.
This is for you, and those days,
When angels watched us play,
Say good bye, and set fire,
Memories, they last forever.

I WantI want a relationship like the movies, the sunset, the green hills, the white grass, the crimson sky.
A relationship based on trust, not on looks or lies.
I want a relationship where we'll cook together but end up burning the food in the end, though we'll both laugh at the end.
I want a relationship where I can trust my partner without worrying about anything.

I want a girl that that stand my dorky side.
A girl who will pretend she's not jealous when I start talking about SNSD when she is, Then to get back at me, start talking about attractive Korean guys,
I want a girl, who can make me smile,
When I have a crappy day at school,
I wan

I'll rewrite this story.I took this pen and scratched out every line,
Don't want to be the same,
I'll re-write the story you've laid out for me,

I won't be part of the trend,
Won't say this is right and pretend,
Say what you will,
But you're only hurting yourself.

Call me gay
Call me emo,
I don't care,
I do what I will, I don't follow.

Anything else you'd like to share? Please do.
Tried to leave me black and blue,
Like you're father once did to you.

Just a writer trying to find himself,
The lonely city sees nothing,
Answers none of my questions,
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Heart

by ~xxdraxx, Sep 30, 2012, 2:30:49 PM
Literature / Poetry / Emotional / Free Verse

I left my heart's door open,
But no one walked in.
I laughed but no one laughed with me.
All that's left is a symphony.
It's coming from the back of my heart.
I'm waiting for someone to hear it.
Will you listen?

Heartby ~xxdraxx

Literature / Poetry / Emotional / Free Verse

WIll you listen?

Critique by *LORD-OF-JUSTICE Nov 27, 2012, 7:37:27 PM

It is not unusual for readers to find the more is said when fewer words are used. Because the few words used happen to be the right words. In this short piece the volumes of emotion from the words are enthralling, most notably the sense of longing. The desire to have someone that close, to be held in your heart and for you to be held in theirs. In this short piece we have a sense of tragic beauty and with the last lines:
I'm waiting for someone to hear it. Will you listen?
The ultimate sense of longing is epitomised in those few words, a feeling much of us are all too familiar with. In such a short piece we have much to see, and what we see is beautiful

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Critique by =Lady-Luck03 Nov 26, 2012, 4:00:37 PM

It's sometimes tricky to critique something so short, but this is a very well written piece. The conceit of the poem is great. I see a war of emotions covered by a blanket of loneliness which really makes the vision clearer.
The literal meaning is great and creative and again that really adds to the poem's conceit. My favorite line is the fifth one. It creates an image of distance and I feel like I'd have to do a great deal to be able to hear that symphony.
The poem is also economized very well. It has just the right amount of words that are organized in a good manner.

Good job and thank you for the read. I enjoyed it.