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It's December 21st, 2012 in Montreal.
      First thing in the morning,
           I look outside my bedroom window and it's snowing.

No wait!
      It's raining.

WAIT – NO!
      It's snowing.

Hold on…
     It's raining again.

It's kind of like this city's friend died,
     And it can't decide if it should give the cold shoulder
          Or if it should cry.

Walking down the street today is like walking across a beach during summer vacation.
     Except the water is sub zero,
          And every now and again you'll have white petals knocking on your head,
As if it wants to tell you something.

Our cities are changing.
     Not just my home town of Montreal.
A Hurricane reached New York only 2 months ago.
     A feat undefeated.
Our cities are heating. Screw whoever says global warming is a myth.
     I don't need money hungry politicians telling me what to believe
So that they can continue to throw trash into the ocean,
So that they invade Afghanistan for its oil like they did to the Iraqi

And I don't give a fuck if I'm only 16,
     I can still see our lifestyle needs a change.

          And when I talk change, I'm not saying to put makeup on it.
I talking inside out, reconfigure it until it pouts.
     Because the coldest summer I've ever experienced is a winter in Montreal.

I never learned to scuba, but I feel like I'll have to,
     After analyzing the parabolas'
The Armageddon never happened today but I feel like it's upon us (Maybe the Mayans forgot to carry the one?).

So medicate this planet,
     Please?

Do it for the clouds.
     For the sound the birds make in the morning during the summer.
Do it because whether you like it or not, this planet is yours and you can't buy another off ebay.

I believe we could give this planet the medical attention it needs.
     I believe we could give it the sunny disposition that it well deserves.
          I believe we could cure its depressive state,
               I believe…
Commenting on today's weather...

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There is some fantastic imagery within this poem, and it reads very clearly as a performance piece. I followed the facebook link in your artists' comment, but I was surprise to find that you haven't posted any links to youtube videos of performances of these pieces. Especially for a piece of poetry designed to be spoken, it might be worth the effort of having a go at recording a this piece since you would be able to really emphasis your inflections into the work.
'White petals knocking on your head' is an interesting phrase, not one I've heard before but it opens the poem up to interpretation. I did think that perhaps a stanza break was needed after 'a feat undefeated.' The next line read very much like the start of a new stanza. I was also a little disappointed by 'do it for the clouds' and so on. This reasoning didn't contain anywhere near the same level of powerful imagery of compelling ideas as other points in the poem.
It was also interesting that you ended on a ellipsis. Personally, and this is only my opinion of course, but I would have like a full-stop, purely for the punch that would have given the last line. The ellipsis detracts from the confidence somewhat.
Overall this piece has some wonderful imagery and some very tough political views put together in a very communicative way. Since this is categorized a spoken word poem though, I feel that I'm not really able to judge it off the page as the tempo you may add over the top could be completely different to the way someone else may preform it. Well done though and I'd be interested to see more of your work.

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authorofthings Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2013
good job lol, like, wow.
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MusicMauMau Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012
Very powerful, I love this. Great job. :)
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xxdraxx Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Student Artist
Thanks xP
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topec Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The world was warming, but it's natural for the planet to do that. The planet goes through hot and cold cycles. Back in the 1970's the scientific community released reports that showed from 1940 to 1970 there was a cooling and there was a panic about Global Cooling back then. There is also recent meteorological data that predicts that the world will be going through a cooling in the next few years. [link] Here is one article outlining what I'm talking about.
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roadkillKitten Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012
This is a very moving piece, well done! I entirely agree with you, I only wish I was in Montreal and not the US! Ugh, survival of the richest....
One thing, the second line from the bold text, I think, is missing an 'm, stupid type-os! One the whole, a powerful piece!
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xxdraxx Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Student Artist
I honestly don't like Montreal too much...ahem Bill 101. I much rather live somewhere in Ontario. I think we all long for what we dont have, i guess xP
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roadkillKitten Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013
Yeah, the grass is always greener... I guess there's always gonna be things you do and don't like about certain places, and hopefully some place you can call "home." Hang in there, maybe you'll get to Ontario. Anything can happen!
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xxdraxx Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Student Artist
I've come to like the people around me a lot. Even though it's not perfect, it's home.
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roadkillKitten Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
That's awesome! Always better to focus on the positives! I'm working on that!
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xxdraxx Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Student Artist
Keep at it! :D
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