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I met her in my dreams.
She tells me she’s lonely, I told her I’m similar.
I tell her everything; she whispers back
“It’s okay. I’m here, you’re alive. You’re breathing.”

She’s the reason I picked up all the pens I did.
The reason I don’t want to sleep most days anymore.

My tears fall every time someone sells her out.
I hate that people use her for the fame & the wealth.
And act like she would give herself up for free.
And act like she would give herself up for free.

My text says “I need you more than ever.”
But wait a minute.
What am I thinking?
Why did I send that?
I’m not ready for that.
Not ready to commit.
‘Cause I’d be really bad at it.
‘Cause I’m only thinking about me.
I’m only thinking about me.

The more honest I get, the weirder you get.
And I’m fine with that.
The more honest I get, the more they hate you.
Are you fine with that?

Friends ask all the time,
If you’re worth it.
There’s no question about it.
Born together. Meant for each other. Soul mates.

All the things I want to give you would take ten of me.
And all the things I want to give would never be enough.
You aren’t worth an arm and a leg. You’re worth so much more.
I give you my heart,
My eyes,
My chest,
My heels,
My ankles,
My elbow.
I give you all of me that I could possibly ever offer.
And I still wish I could give so much more.

Here’s to you, my first love.
Here’s to my obsession, my passion, my flame, my ice. My everything.
This isn't about a girl. Try to figure out who's it for. I challenge you.

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Delta-13 Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hi! I am critiquing this on the behalf of :iconpowerfulwriting:

I like this piece. It is very straightforward, but very sweet. I like some of your imagery and I love the part where you talk about the more honest you the weirder she gets I think that is brilliant and describes how most people feel about their writing. I also liked the part when you talk about what you are willing to give your art. Again I think it describes how most artists feel when its comes to their creations.

This poem does not flow as well as some of your other poems I have read and I found the chose to repeat some lines a little distracting. The repeated sentences, to me anyway, break up the rhyme of the poem. Other than that though, I thought it was a well written poem.
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xxdraxx Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2014  Student Artist
Haha. Thank you :)
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LunarNightmare Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
is it your writing or your art?
Its been awhile im not sure if someones guessed already :P
If they have and i'm wrong please tell me the answer :)
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xxdraxx Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014  Student Artist
Read the previous comments. :P
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Haleylyd Featured By Owner May 31, 2014  Student General Artist
so beautiful......*sheds a tear*
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xxdraxx Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2014  Student Artist
Thanks :)
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19andMugsy Featured By Owner May 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I met her in my dreams.

perfect place, time and 
state of mind. 
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xxdraxx Featured By Owner May 23, 2014  Student Artist
Dreams are always perfect.
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19andMugsy Featured By Owner May 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Affirmative, i wrote quite a few about dreams myself! :) 
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xxdraxx Featured By Owner May 24, 2014  Student Artist
Awesome!
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